1. I really like it when you guys comment, because I crave feedback.
2. I'd really appreciate it if you guys checked out Alfred's blog. She hasn't really gotten into it yet, but I've been encouraging her, and she's thinking about drawing my OC's. So I suggested that she could ask for your (Blogland people) OC's, and draw them for you guys. She's an excellent drawer, so you should seriously consider it. DON'T POST YOUR OC'S YET! THAT'S IMPORTANT! NOT YET! Another thing is that she's also writing a story, but she loves having support!
http://alfredxdthe1st.blogspot.com.au/
Is the link to her blog. Go check it out!
And now, without any further babbling, more of the story!
‘They’re
vampires.’ Francis mutters.
‘Zombies.’
Zoey, Bill and Louis say simultaneously. Francis keeps grumbling as we cross
the road. The automatic doors to the mall won’t open, but that isn’t much of a
problem seeing as they’re shattered already. We each step through the glass
carefully and walk into the mall. I look around and see a distinct pattern in
the architecture. The floor is marble, and it’s splattered with blood. The
pillars are marble covered in plaster (you can tell from the holes in the
plaster) and they’re splattered in blood. Shop windows are cracked, broken and
are splattered with blood. We walk through the mall in silence, except for the
obvious shooting of Infected. We walk into the super market and Bill stops us.
‘Check
use by dates on everything, get batteries and matches.’ He says. I nod and
immediately walk to the meat section, paying attentive attention to levels of
mould on everything. I see some lamb cutlets, steaks and sausages. I pick up
packets of things and start walking to the matches. I pick up seven boxes of
matches and shove them into my pockets. I turn around and see a Boomer.
‘Boomer!’
I shout. I hear someone running up behind me.
‘Don’t
shoot until you have to.’ Zoey’s voice whispers in my ears.
‘I
know.’
‘Does
it know we’re here?’
‘Not
yet.’
‘Then
why don’t we leave before it pukes on us?’
‘Great
idea.’ We slide out of the aisle. We relax and keep looking for food. We hear
Bill’s voice.
‘Cut
the horseshit, Francis and get your ass down here.’ We hear Francis swear and I
shrug. I look back down the aisle at the Boomer, and see Francis stumble
backwards into it.
‘Oh
God…’ I mutter. The Boomer explodes, covering Francis and Bill in bile.
‘Ah,
shit!’ Francis shouts. ‘My vest!’
‘Get
you’re head outta your ass, Francis, we got bigger problems!’ Bill scowls. ‘If
you hadn’t been foolin’ around, this wouldn’t have happened!’
‘Don’t
blame me! If you hadn’t startled me, I wouldn’t have tripped!’
‘Are
they like that all the time?’ I ask Zoey quietly. She sighs and nods. Oh. That
sucks. I walk to the entrance of the super market and watch for Infected. I see
one. Bam. Another. Hole in its head. A third. I aim, but someone else gets
there first. Louis is pointing a rifle at the space where the zombie was.
‘A
team can always use more members. Try not to die.’ He says, reloading.
‘I
wasn’t planning on it.’
‘Good.’
He holds the gun up again. ‘Look out, here they come.’ The horde runs up and
Louis, Zoey and I open fire on them. Eventually I run out of bullets, and the
Infected are getting closer. In a flash I’ve pulled out two Magnum Pistols, and
am firing again.
‘Reloadin’!’ I hear Francis’ voice shout. I
look over at him and shoot a zombie that’s about to get him. He looks up with
the loaded gun and sees the Infected fall in front of him. I turn away and keep shooting.
God, they just don't stop! Zoey pulls put a pipe bomb.
'Take cover!' she shouts, tossing it.
She then runs into a nearby store. Each of us does the same. I end up in a pawn
shop. I hear the explosion come from outside and I peek through the window. An
Infected crashes through the window, and gets up slowly behind me. I hold the
guns up at it, and pull the triggers of both. Nothing happens.
'Ah...Shit...' I throw the two pistols
at it and sprint through the shelves of the pawn shop, trying to find something
to whack it with. A nightstick catches my eye. Brilliant. I pick it up and
swing it around. The Infected crashes into the aisle behind me. I whirl and
crack the baton against its head. It groans, stumbles to the side and I bring
the Nightstick down on its forehead. The Infected collapses. I growl and turn.
I walk out of the store and run to the others. They've started shooting again.
I pick up my shotgun again and reload it quickly. I start shooting as well. The
Nightstick is hanging from my belt when an Infected grabs it and pulls me
backwards into it. It bites into my left shoulder.
'Agh!' I shout. I flip the gun over the
back of my shoulder and shoot it.
'Cover me!' I yell. I kneel and wrap a
bandage around my shoulder. I stand up and start shooting again.
Eventually the Infected disperse and we
pick up our bags of food. Louis comes over.
'Are you okay? You look torn up pretty
bad.'
'I'm fine.' I grunt. I then glance at my
left shoulder and see the bloodied bandage. I conceal a wince and sling the bag
over my shoulder.
'Lets just back onto a roof and eat this
food.' I say. We jog to the street and climb up the ladders. I sit down and
empty my bag. The others do the same. All together we have bread, meat, a few
fruit, some clean water, eight boxes of matches and about fifty different sized
batteries. Bill bends over to get a fire going. I look at my shoulder again and
peel the blood-soaked bandage off. The hole in my arm is about half an inch
deep, and two inches wide. It's still bleeding. Zoey comes over and arches her
eyebrow.
'Not much of a complainer, are you?' she
asks.
'Never really saw the point, to be
honest.' I say with gritted teeth. If you ever get a hole in yourself, try and
make it somewhere you can reach easily.
'Do you want some help?'
'No, I think I'll just struggle a little
while longer.' I scowl. She rolls her eyes and starts bandaging my shoulder
tightly.
'Thanks.'
'No need.' she finishes wrapping the
bandage and knots the end. 'You ever been bitten before?'
'A few times. Figure I'm immune or
something.'
'Well you would've turned by now if you
weren't.'
'Good point.' I look over at Bill. 'He
doesn't like me very much.' I say, nodding towards him.
'He doesn't like anyone very much.'
'Then why'd he stick with you?'
'No idea. But he refuses to leave us
behind now.'
'We
wouldn't last five minutes without Bill.' Louis adds, chiming in.
Because apparently saying "I like" is enough...
ReplyDeleteIt's good, Sparky. A nice continuation on what you already had written down and I also like that you included the last 1/2 lines of the last part so I know where the hell I am. That also stimulates my mind and makes me remember what I've already read seeing as I have a habit to forget.
The story itself is good, engaging and full of nice, sweet, zombie brutality. Can't wait for more.
I'm already following Alfred's blog but I will be giving her my OC.
Please remove the Word Verification.
Cool. :)
ReplyDeleteI think i need to know a little more about L4D to fully understand
ReplyDeleteBy hell it's engaging
I love it
You're really into left 4 dead, and i think that's part of what makes your story so good.
ReplyDeleteLove it.
Love it! Wish I could get it...
ReplyDelete:/
Will go check out Alfred's blog...
I think I know more about the comic/game just by the stories you write about it. :)
ReplyDeleteTo tell the truth, I'm not much into this kind of thing, but you really make it interesting! Love it! :)
you walk into the meat section
ReplyDeleteso you......
love it bro keep going!!!!!!!!